Little wonder we stumble in life.

Trifecta – Mouth


It was a dirty, rundown city. First she’d run from her kidnappers, only to discover she was far from home, in a foreign country, now again facing the mouth of the cellar where they’d kept her bound up.

She ran harsh, coarse fingers through her dirty yellow hair, feeling stress and fear overtake her once again.

They’d find her. She was still lost in this building, and soon they’d find her. They’d beat her again. Oh, why was she here?

It was impossible. She broke down for a moment under the window, crouched down close to the ground, fingers still in her hair.

Maybe they wouldn’t find her if they couldn’t see her through the window. Even she knew that was a lie. How long had she been running? It was inevitable now. She almost wished they’d find her now, so they could complete her torture and be done with it.

But wait. Footsteps.

They clacked down the adjacent hall just to her right. Any moment now, it didn’t even matter how soon she wished for it or not. Any minute…

He emerged, freezing as he spotted her. He looked from her, to the mouth. She followed his gaze to the sign, engraved into black-painted wood: 出口 deguchi… Exit.

She sounded out each syllable in shock, speaking slowly. “De… guchi…”

Suddenly, the stranger spoke. “Hayaku!” Pulling her up, he yanked her startlingly along. Who was this man? Was he trying to save her, or…?

They burst outside. Safe… or maybe not.

“Hayaku!” he cried, and she was yanked again, double shock to her system. She looked ahead of her, beyond the sight of him beside her… a pair of gates. He was helping her escape.

Then everything exploded as the air ripped into a whirlwind around her and dust flew up, dirtying her more.

So close… she was almost there…

Her skin was ripped open, her bones feeling bent and her blood gushing. The man pulled her harder…

And somehow, they escaped.

Prompt inspired by Trifecta and the header of this site.



Author: littlewonder2

I'm 25, and I blog to improve my writing; I want to be good enough to be published. I also studied Japanese when I was younger. Luckily, I'll be able to continue those studies along with Creative Writing next year in University.

13 thoughts on “Trifecta – Mouth

  1. You have a terrific way with your words. Amazing descriptions!

  2. Horrific, really well done.

  3. Very tense… I’m still trying to figure out how she escaped. Was she just injured? I guess it is the sign of a good read if I want to know more. 😉

    • Yes, she was just injured. Even after I finished writing the piece, I was already thinking ahead to what happens next. Maybe I might do that in my next Trifecta challenge.

      Thanks for the compliment.

  4. Full of tension.

    [One note: after Footsteps, you use “it” rather than “they”. Does “it” refer to something other than footsteps? Also, I think you can leave out How at the start of the second sentence.]

  5. wow. that kept me on edge…:)

  6. That was real and terrifying… you described that image well… I am glad she escaped.

  7. Her fear was palpable in the whole piece. Awesome job. (:

  8. Sharp writing-loved the edginess & end left me wanting to know more:-)Fabulous piece!

  9. And yes great picture to supplement the story:-)

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