littlewonder2

Little wonder we stumble in life.

Friday Fictioneers – Dilapidated

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Copyright-Janet Webb

The farm had failed years ago. The owners had just picked up one day and left. Not even the real estate market wanted it.

She had grown up next to it. She always wanted to explore what was inside, but of course her parents didn’t allow her to. She was a good little girl.

The neighbourhood boys didn’t care what their parents told them, they just went wherever they wanted. She tried to find out about the farmhouse, but they bragged and refused. It was too much for her; she had to see.

She wished she hadn’t. They bullrushed her as soon as she did.

Friday Fictioneer‘s prompt.

Author: littlewonder2

I'm 25, and I blog to improve my writing; I want to be good enough to be published. I also studied Japanese when I was younger. Luckily, I'll be able to continue those studies along with Creative Writing next year in University.

11 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Dilapidated

  1. Oh dear, this doesn’t sound too good. But at least she was alive to wish she hadn’t… Nicely sinister.

  2. I really like this. I hope she’s okay!

  3. Dear Little Wonder,
    Ding, ding, ding!!!! You are the 100th entry this week. A first for Friday Fictioneers.
    Scary story. Nice writing.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

  4. oooh. Nasty. heart breaking and well done.

    You really got the emotional juices going – nice writing.

    Randy

  5. Scary story, hope she’s OK.
    Nicely done.
    Dee

  6. yes there is a sinister darkness behind the innocent picket fence. You have your reader’s interest piqued

  7. Moral to the story? Mind your parents. nice job.

  8. Oh my…didn’t see that coming!

  9. Timely addition of terror to an otherwise innocent desire. Nicely written story. 🙂

  10. I like the restrained style leading to the sharp ending. Evocative.

  11. The price we pay when we feel we are above the warnings of our more experienced parents. She will regret this quickly I know.

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